October Girl

Oh geez, I loved this poem! It was so... depressing. It was great and no, you shouldn't change the name it fits perfectly. Nice job, good luck and keep writing.

Yeah school sucks :( but hey that's life. Now my mom's got me sighing up for track.... great just more time at school. But whatever sometimes school can be fun ...

Hey, welcome to YWS I'm Max and well I'm not at all new so if you need help go ahead and PM me or whatever ^.^ here to help -Max

He's the one I can't live without. He's the one whose always around, he's the one speaking now he's the one I can only dream about. Trust was a must ...

hmm, I'm going to pick apart your work! No, I'm just kidding. Um, this needs to besplit up into different stanza and don't worry since everyone else has stollen all ...

hunter

8/10 lol good one Mad

5/10.... ok not bad

This really sucks.... could he die any younger? If he did this for attention... (well I'm not saying he did) But! If he did that was a really stupid way ...

4/10 I mean I like animals but... ah.... it's too plane sorry.... :(

ah.... what? 5/10 just kidding :D

3/10... uh... that's disturbing

I loved this poem because, it was short up to the point and you didn't bore me at all, lol. This was very creative, anyways welcome to YWS! Keep writng ...

Ah... your title... *rubs back of neck with arm* I can't help but feel like I'm being shouted at. No worries though. Um as for the poem it was OK ...

I love vampire stories.... I still don't know why.... -Max